A strange noise through the woods caught Godwin’s ear. He could move silently through the forest, but he stilled himself to listen. It was rare to encounter anyone on his pre-dawn patrols of the Upper Culdees. Poachers and outlaws usually stayed well south of the forest’s Villein road. He nocked his arrow all the same.
“Dearest Lord, help me.” The woman’s voice was hoarse and tempered by her crying. Godwin wasn’t sure if this was another trap laid by poachers to rid the forest of its woodsman, so he approached slowly, his arrow at the ready.
The ground ahead sloped downward toward a stream. Godwin crept up to the rise and peered down. A woman sat against a redwood, her skirts pulled up around her waist, her bare legs and womanly parts exposed. All stealth forgotten, Godwin dropped his bow. It clattered against a tree.
The woman turned and locked eyes with Godwin. Her face was flushed and rosy with exertion, her dark hair had fallen from the coil on her head and her cheeks were lined with tears. Godwin had never seen anything more beautiful in all his days.
"By God, you must help me,” the woman cried. “My babe, it’s to be born.”
Godwin wiped his palms on his cloak. “Can you bear to be carried? We’ve a midwife in town--.” Godwin made sure to keep his eyes on the woman’s own. Hers were warm and brown and betrayed her fear.
“No! No midwife, please.” The woman pressed herself into the firmness of the tree and groaned. Godwin steeled himself against his frantic heart and knelt in front of the woman. He was unsure how to help but familiar enough with what needed to be done.
The boy child arrived as the sun broke over the horizon. With the babe at her breast, Godwin bundled the woman in his cloak and carried her through the woods to his small house on the eastern edge of town. Godwin lay the woman in his bed near the fire.
As she fell asleep she spoke softly. Godwin received her words with a chill.
“They’re coming to kill the child.”
***
Later that morning, Godwin watched his brother the blacksmith prepare the fire in the forge. “She didn’t say anything more.”
“You can’t keep them hidden in your woods-shack forever. Someone’s bound to notice a babe’s wailing in the night.” Godwin knew he was right.
They were interrupted by thundering hooves that sounded through the town.
Godwin walked to the shop door and watched a dozen men on warhorses crowding the square. They wore the livery of the Northern King.
“People of Renaissance!” a horseman bellowed, “I am King Ansel."
Gasps were heard through the gathering crowd as the people began to bow uncertainly. This was their King, although his rule had never taken hold in the far reaches of Renaissance.
The King continued, "My sister, the Princess Cassandra, has died in her childbed. Her son, my nephew, the prince and heir, a wee babe has been kidnapped by his midwife. We’ve tracked the outlaw through Heriot’s Pass and into your woods. We require a guide.”
All eyes turned to Godwin, the only woodsman in the Upper Culdees. The King’s words startled Godwin, but not because he was being called upon to help.
Godwin knew the King was lying. And he wanted to know why.
Read Part 2: King Ansel's Tale posted 10/12/11.
Prompts used:
There is an argument (albeit small)
There is fear of an impending misfortune
Someone might fall in love
Wordcount: 564
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who have offered copies of their books to the winners:
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Ooh! This sounds like something interesting will happen. Good intro. :-)
ReplyDeleteGreat first couple of scenes! I'm certainly engaged in the story and want to know what happens next! :D
ReplyDeleteNice! We already know the king is a liar and have strong suspicions that he's up to no good.
ReplyDeleteYes, yes, yes, and yes. Well done.
ReplyDeleteLoved this opening. You have me curious, wanting more. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI loved both the opening and the ending!
ReplyDeletegreat start - looking foward to next
ReplyDeleteGood set-up against the king! Curious why he'd want to kill the baby, "stolen" by the midwife and not the midwife instead, but then I think you're setting me up with her line "they're coming to kill the baby" and maybe she's a little cannier than her helplessness suggests. Great triangle of suspicion.
ReplyDeleteI like it and I definitely want to know why the king is lying, too!
ReplyDeleteI like the conflict set up with the king's arrival, and I'm curious as to where Godwin is going to bring the not-so-good king.
ReplyDeletethe surprise of finding a woman giving birth is so well-done. I love that he found her beautiful...and the complexity of the lie is great!
ReplyDeleteAwww, I want more now! Why is the king lying? Why is the princess hiding? Where's the babe's father? Oh my. You've got me hooked.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for commenting. I found you straight away and WOW! What an entry! It flowed well and fast. My kind of read. I finally have mine up now, when you have chance.
ReplyDeleteI want to know why the king is lying, too. I'll be back next week! :)
Kings always lie, David! LOL. Great pacing and even better cliff-hanger, Roland
ReplyDeleteThis is a note to say that I’ve been by to read your entry. As one of the judges, I don’t want to make any specific comments that could betray my judgement — keeps you guys in suspense for longer! :) Suffice it to say that I’m truly enjoying all the different and creative takes on Renaissance and the Rule of 3!
ReplyDeleteJ.C.
This is a wonderful beginning, a lot of mystery and subterfuge I see ahead.
ReplyDeleteGreat beginning story! I was instantly drawn to Godwin and want to hear more of his "adventure".
ReplyDeleteoooooh! SO COOL! I love the tension, you've done such a great job with it. :) I had a really hard time with my entry, but this flows so easily.
ReplyDeleteI love this! Godwin is such a great character.
ReplyDeleteI love your entry--it hooked me from the start!
ReplyDeleteWow! Great tension. Looking forward to seeing what happens next.
ReplyDeleteThat was great! I loved "They're coming to kill my baby" and the lying King.
ReplyDeleteOh my; I want to know why the King is lying too.
ReplyDeleteWhat exquisite characters and culture you've set up here.
......dhole
Hi Corinne! On my way through the REN3 entries...as a host, I'm being sparing with comments. Looking forward to reading more, and thanks for the links :-)
ReplyDeleteYea, yea, I want to know why too! How intriguing this is!
ReplyDeleteWell, I finally make my way here...and glad I did. As the others, can only say so much, but I'm loving how the time lines and further geography are being explored.
ReplyDeleteThanks...looking forward to more.
Stuart
Tale Spinning
ps: thank you again for all of your support on Tale Spinning
Wow what a situation to walk in on, and wow what a turn of events! I want to know why he's lying too. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteHi, this is a good one. Great suspense. Looking forward to part 2 on wed/thurs.
ReplyDeleteA childbirth, I didn't see that coming! With this set up, next week's prompt "One of the characters is revealed to be not who or she is" and "A character lies to another on an important matter" will be a breeze :D Can't wait to read it!
ReplyDeleteWow! This was great.
ReplyDeleteVery exciting. I am off to read your next installment.
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